Photo of Cape Disappointment in Washington State (the poet)‘Cape Disappointment’ by James A. Tweedie The Society September 14, 2018 Beauty, Poetry 14 Comments a rondeau Cape Disappointment, battered and distressed, Besieged, beset, by brute-force waves hard-pressed As broad and deep Columbia collides With Chinook-whipped Pacific Ocean tides— Leviathans unchained, their fury unsuppressed. Above the windswept surge of trough and crest A sentinel’s cyclopic eye turns west, Revealing what the fading daylight hides; Cape Disappointment. With ebbing sighs, the waning winds divest Themselves of wrath and seek surcease in rest, As o’er the bar the silent river glides, And high above, the watchful eye presides; By ocean, river, land and sky caressed— Cape Disappointment. James A. Tweedie is a recently retired pastor living in Long Beach, Washington. He likes to walk on the beach with his wife. He has written and self-published four novels and a collection of short stories. He has several hundred unpublished poems tucked away in drawers. Views expressed by individual poets and writers on this website and by commenters do not represent the views of the entire Society. The comments section on regular posts is meant to be a place for civil and fruitful discussion. Pseudonyms are discouraged. The individual poet or writer featured in a post has the ability to remove any or all comments by emailing submissions@ classicalpoets.org with the details and under the subject title “Remove Comment.” Share this:Click to share on Twitter (Opens in new window)Click to share on Facebook (Opens in new window) Related 14 Responses E. V. September 14, 2018 Beautiful! Loved it. This is a poem I’ll enjoy reading again … and again. Reply Amy Foreman September 14, 2018 This is great, James! It’s been a long time since I read such a dramatic poetic interaction between humanity and unfettered nature. Thank you for including the matching photo of Cape Disappointment which I have never seen, but which your words seem to so aptly describe. Reply M. S. Dogara September 14, 2018 This is a great one (Cape Disappointment). I like the diction. Weldone. Reply David St. John September 14, 2018 I very much enjoy Mr. Tweedie’s poetry. This one especially resonates with me. Reply Michael R. Burch September 21, 2018 Are you the David St. John who wrote the poem “Guitar,” by any chance? Reply David Paul Behrens September 14, 2018 The more I read this poem, the more I feel as though I am actually there, at Cape Disappointment. It is very descriptive and well written. Reply David Watt September 14, 2018 Creating a poem from the inspiration of a dynamic photo has paid off handsomely. Your rondeau captures the unfolding drama of this scene. Well done. Reply William Krusch September 14, 2018 As I read your poem while the rains from Hurricane Florence pounded against my window, I couldn’t help but think at first that the cyclopic eye of the poem was the eye of Florence… But yes, lighthouses are also monocular, so fair game. Your use of consonance with the repeated “b’s” (voiced bilabial stops if we want to get technical about phonics, I suppose) works well to produce and effect of propulsion, which is quite fitting for waves, of course. The ‘A’ rhyme certainly helps to create a feeling of being pushed forward, and the the contrast with the openness of the ‘B’ rhyme is fine. Reply Mark Stone September 14, 2018 James, Hello. 1. The assonance, consonance and alliteration in phrases such as “fading daylight hides” and “seeks surcease in rest” and “waning winds divest” is impressive. 2. In L3, I wish there were a way to say, while maintaining the meter, “the Columbia” or “the Columbia River.” You would never say “Columbia is a mile wide here.” You would say “The Columbia is a mile wide here.” So L3 sounds a bit awkward, since there is no “the.” 3. L5 has one more foot than the other lines, but it does not diminish the poem, in my view. 4. In L8, I would change the semi-colon to a colon. 5. In L11, since “surcease” means “cessation,” perhaps it would make more sense to say “seeks surcease and rest,” rather than “seeks surcease in rest.” Just a thought. 6. Notwithstanding these points, the poem is very nicely crafted. I enjoyed it. Reply James A. Tweedie September 14, 2018 Mark, Thank you for your comments and suggestions. My intent was to project a personification onto “the” river rendering the “the” extraneous. I confess I slipped on the extra foot. In my reading of the poem I somehow managed to elide “leviathan” into one beat, a slip I should have caught. I knowingly and intentionally bent the syntax of surcease just a little to maintain the alliteration. I didn’t think anyone would notice. . . but I was wrong! After submission I noticed the same punctuation improvements that you did. I have already incorporated them into my copy of the text. You have an eagle eye! Reply James A. Tweedie September 14, 2018 I am grateful for the positive response to my poem—my first attempt at a rondeau. From my home I can drive to the place where I took the picture (locally known as “Waikiki Beach”) in 20-25 minutes. The poem was not, in fact, inspired by the picture but by personally mexperiencing this spectacular area every day. The Columbia River bar is the most dangerous stretch of navigable water in the United States. The Coast Guard has its ocean rescue training base there. Reply David Hollywood September 15, 2018 Very enjoyable poem with lots of scenic description and drama. Thank you.. Reply James Sale September 15, 2018 Really enjoyed this evocative poem; and what a forbidding name for an actual place: ‘Cape Disappointment’ – ooh! Well done, James. Reply C.B. Anderson September 17, 2018 As usual, nice work, James. I’ve never written a rondeau, but I have published more than one rondeau redouble. Perhaps I shall give it a try, and perhaps you shall write one of the latter one day. It’s a difficult form, but I’m sure you will make the best of it. Reply Leave a Reply Cancel Reply Your email address will not be published.CommentName* Email* Website Notify me of follow-up comments by email. Notify me of new posts by email. This site uses Akismet to reduce spam. Learn how your comment data is processed.