A Winter landscape by Francois Koch‘To Winter’ by David Gosselin The Society January 12, 2018 Beauty, Poetry 17 Comments When Horae’s icy carpets sweep the dale And the heavy boughs shed their frozen tears, The earth is covered with her icy veil And mortals lashed with Time’s cold sneers. Yet let us not run from such cold deceived As our salted tears turn to wintry pearls The soul to snowy mounts still lead Though icy winds the frigid rose unfurls. While Ida still wears her wintry veil And our hearth can heat but can never warm, Apollo’s car should still the heavens sail Though our sad minstrels sleep with Pan forlorn. While within the wide wilderness cold stays The crystal lake and the ever green bow, From snowy Olympus I hear a muse’s lays And see the Streams of Helicon still flow. Poet’s Note Horae are the Goddesses of the seasons. The reference to Pan is that of poetry devoted simply to nature and the senses, which is what our so-called poets, the “minstrels” of today, seem obsessed with, while poets like Keats or Dante always used images of nature and the senses as a foil to bring people to a higher realm, the realm of ideas. Thus even in Winter, despite the cold and going through some hard times at that time myself, the Streams of Helicon (one of the sacred streams of the muses) still flow, regardless of season, regardless of time. David Bellemare Gosselin is a student in classics and languages in Montreal. His poetry, translations, and essays can be read on TheChainedMuse.com Related Post ‘The Country Club’ and Other Poetry by Alexander... The Country Club To think about a country club Begun for whisky in a tub, Distilled from fields of golden corn In a town where I was born For f... Tell the world:FacebookTwitterTumblrPinterestRedditLinkedInEmail 17 Responses C.B. Anderson January 12, 2018 So David, if it’s your intention to write metrical verse, it’s not enough to count syllables. The accents must be put in the right place. I hope you will not be overly offended by the Return of the Meter-Cop, but I must take issue with a good number of your constructions. Line by line, here we go: Line 1: This line is perfectly good iambic pentameter, but I wonder whether “Horae’s,” since it must be construed as a plural form, should not be rendered “Horaes'”, although words taken from other languages probably deserve plural possessive forms taken from the language of origin. , does not LIne 2: I think you intended “boughs,” but the line, in any case, does not scan. Perhaps you might have written: And heavy boughs let loose their frozen tears Lines 3 & 4: metrically perfect, but should be preceded with a period at the end of Line 2 to preserve normative English grammar. Lines 5 & 6: These lines do not scan. Perhaps they could be rewritten: Yet let us not evade such cold received As salty tears turn into wintry pearls Line 7: You have suddenly gone from pentameter to tetrameter. Why? Line 8: As a lifelong gardener, I have never seen a frozen rose unfurl its petals, but I’ll chalk that up to poetic license. Line 9: This does not scan. I don’t know who Ida is, but I think While Ida still puts on her wintry veil would serve to preserve the sense & metrical integrity of the poem I’ll stop here, although I still have many reservations about the metrics, rhetoric, and logic of the poem. Perhaps the only line with which I have no issue is the very last. Reply David B. Gosselin January 13, 2018 Hi Anderson, Yeah it’s an old poem, I thought the virtue of it was the idea, you may or may not agree. Ida is the ancient mountain in Greece, which Homer mentions in the Iliad as a place where the Gods watched the battle of Troy raging. The idea was the image of this old mountain, now covered in snow is buried and somewhat lost to us today. However, that aside even Keats has a poem, Ode to a Nightingale, with more discrepancies than one would think, take just the first stanza: My heart aches, and a drowsy numbness pains My sense, as though of hemlock I had drunk, Or emptied some dull opiate to the drains One minute past, and Lethe-wards had sunk: ‘Tis not through envy of thy happy lot. But being too happy in thine happiness,— That thou, light-winged Dryad of the trees In some melodious plot Of beechen green, and shadows numberless, Singest of summer in full-throated ease. I counted at least four such discrepancies, and none of them seemed to have a real purpose. This is not degrading Keats at all, it’s just showing to what extent even some of the greatest stuff ever written, will look over such discrepancies when striving after a particular idea. I think Keats just did not want a mathematical rule to overpower the idea he was trying to get across. Slight mathematical discrepancies do not have the power to weigh down a great idea in poetry. Were we talking about mathematical formulas, then such a discrepancy would void the value of that formula, for practical purposes at least. So I agree a great poet should have mastery of all facets of poetry, but with that said, even the best allow some room for discrepancy. Poetry should not be the product of strict mathematical rules. Keats wrote on precisely this issue (also having discrepancies in that very piece), as he did in the Ode to a Nightingale, which was written much later too. However, rather than it coming from me, I would just highlight this passage from Keats himself: “Sleep and Poetry”: […]Ah dismal soul’d! The winds of heaven blew, the ocean roll’d Its gathering waves—ye felt it not. The blue Bared its eternal bosom, and the dew Of summer nights collected still to make The morning precious: beauty was awake! Why were ye not awake? But ye were dead To things ye knew not of,—were closely wed To musty laws lined out with wretched rule And compass vile: so that ye taught a school Of dolts to smooth, inlay, and clip, and fit, Till, like the certain wands of Jacob’s wit, Their verses tallied. Easy was the task: A thousand handicraftsmen wore the mask Of Poesy. Ill-fated, impious race! That blasphemed the bright Lyrist to his face, And did not know it,—no, they went about, Holding a poor, decrepid standard out Mark’d with most flimsy mottos, and in large The name of one Boileau! Boileau was the authority of the day dictating what constituted poetry based on the primacy of precise metrical construction. We don’t hear about him anymore. The problem was he was obsessed with rules, like a Kantian who dictates that morality is based on your ability to follow rules. While the rules are important, poetry is ultimately an instinct, it must be like nature or it is not poetry. In the same way, morality only has value if you truly mean it. Doing the right thing just because someone said it’s the right thing, does not make you moral does it? Anyone who must rely on rules in order to produce a piece of poetry, is not a poet and does not write poetry. You are definitely right that To Winter has several discrepancies, more than it should. I take ownership of that, but I would much rather have an imperfect poem, and only become better with time, rather than only have words organized according to mathematical rules, and not poetry. Anyone can do that, which is what Keats is saying in his piece. You can find some better poems of mind on my website though to prove I can do much better, in case you think I’m trying to make excuses. Let me know if you think that one is better, it’s called The Gardens of Cordoba: https://www.thechainedmuse.com/single-post/2017/12/04/The-Gardens-of-C%C3%B3rdoba Reply Tell it Like it is January 12, 2018 C.B., This is not eratosphere. If you have nothing good to say, say nothing at all. Go back to the garden and pull rhubarb, learn not to enjamb so much and not to thump so much with your metre. You came to poetry very late and it shows. David Gosselin, I enjoyed your Hendecasyllable truly classical poem. Thanks for sharing. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Hendecasyllable Reply C.B. Anderson January 15, 2018 Though what I say might not be good, I hope that it is understood. I’ve pulled the rhubarb, plus the weeds, And hope that adventitious seeds Will plague me nevermore. I reap As I have sown, and when I sleep I only hope that what I’ve said Will not torment me when I’m dead. Saying nothing that isn’t good does not advance the merit of literary criticism. Thumping meter has never been an issue with Richard Wilbur or our own Joseph Charles MacKenzie. Both of them always got it exactly right at every turn. As for hendecasyllable poetry, I cannot find a single line in your poem that has eleven syllables. What should I make of that? And, pray tell, what’s wrong with enjambment? Reply C.B. Anderson January 14, 2018 Actually, I agree with almost everything you wrote. If I have a single cavil, It might be that formal poetry creates certain expectations of regularity, to which the poet should live up to as far as possible. Precise mathematical rules, as you say, are not of the essence; they are guidelines and not laws. This idea is formalized in the general allowance for metrical substitutions. Reply Acwiles Berude January 15, 2018 Mr. Gosselin has pointed out that there are metrical “discrepancies” in the first stanza of Keats’ “Ode to a Nightingale,” at least four. I wonder what those specific four, or more, are. And why “none of them seemed to have a real purpose”? He also stated that we don’t hear about Boileau anymore. It is true Boileau is a rarety in discourse these days; but I seem to remember Joseph MacKenzie, and myself, as well, invoking Boileau in one of these literary streams. Just because someone is not mentioned does not discount their work. I rarely hear anyone speaking of Alcaeus, Baccylides, Callimachus, Dioscorides, Ennius, Fronto, Gallus, etc. these days; but that doesn’t mean that what they accomplished wasn’t important. It only suggests that we aren’t thinking about them. I know I recently wrote a poem invoking the spirit of Terence; and frankly nobody cares; but that does not mean that the accomplishments of Terence are not significant. I think it says more about us than it does about him. Your poem, hoever, did inspire me to respond in like: Kazdaği by Çelebi Ürwëdas “…this old mountain…is somewhat lost to us today…” —David B. Gosselin Perhaps it got its name, Mount Ida, in the Bronze Age times, when Teucri came from Cretan shores and slightly varied climes. Perhaps Aeneas left his sacred cattle there before Achilles came to take them during horrid, raging war. Herodotus wrote that King Xerxes passed through Antandros, from Sardis to the Hellespont and his impending loss, that place from which Aeneas left to go to ancient Rome; in tears he left his coast to find another land and home. Today the crystalline, volcanic mass of ancient fame is the possesser of a rather more prosaic name. The region has become a draw for hikers and their crews, who seek fresh oxygen, the waterfalls and scenic views. The wooded, wind-swept massif in northwestern Turkey called Goose Mountain, and whose summit is, due to exposure, bald, contains, amidst the villages connected by stone paths, deer, wild boar and jackals in the Turkish-fir-tree swaths. Reply Acwiles Berude January 15, 2018 Note: I also seem to have violated a “rule”—and misspelled “however.” Reply C.B. Anderson January 15, 2018 I did not notice, and could not find, your misspelling of “however,” and I haven’t the slightest idea how I should pronounce your name. But the verse you provided in your comment was superb. Where can I see more of its kind? C.B. Anderson January 16, 2018 I finally found it. No big deal. David B. Gosselin January 15, 2018 Hi Acwiles, I think what Keats said about Boileau is pretty straight forward. I was only concurring with Keats. However I’m sure you can find the discrepancies in Keats’ Ode. Otherwise ask Anderson, he’ll know. As a sign of good faith however, I would offer up a second palate cleanser: https://www.thechainedmuse.com/single-post/2017/12/30/The-Sea Reply C.B. Anderson January 15, 2018 David, I really liked “The Sea”. I haven’t quite figured out the pattern, but it was “all of a piece.” Duc Blaise Were January 16, 2018 “Le temps fuit, et nous traine avec soi: Le moment ou je parle est déjà loin de moi.” —Nicolas Boileau-Despréaux Reply C.B. Anderson January 16, 2018 Give me a break. I’m no Francophone. Reply Basel Drew Eceu January 16, 2018 I agree with Mr. Gosselin on the importance of studying different languages. In the New Millennium there is such access to linguistic traditions it is breathtaking. Online, one can find innumerable translations, including Mr. Gosselin’s and Mr. Thron’s translation of Schiller’s original “The Gods of Greece.” One can even find, if one looks, translations of Nicolas Boileau-Despréaux; in this case, “Time flies and draws us with it:/ The moment in which I am speaking is already far from me.” I have no qualms about the importance of the poetry of John Keats; however, the idolatry I find @ SCP & even free-verse sites across the Web has ignited this tennos: Lamenting Lamia by Euclidrew Base No, all charms don’t fly at the touch of bright philosophy; philosophy extends an angels wings; it also frees. It opens landscapes of the mind, as Newton did for Keats, who had the chance to gaze on nature’s deepest mysteries. With rule and line, he could divine, the godly formulae: a rainbow’s arc from white light shining in a charming law; the calculus to measure movement in the universe; acceleration multiplied by mass on planet Earth; the force that through the green fuse drives the flower to the skies, and gravity that draws all things before our very eyes. Reply David B. Gosselin January 17, 2018 Thank you for the kind words to both Mr. Anderson and Mr. Base. Euclidrew, I found your post on Riemann: https://oddballmagazine.com/2017/12/22/wise-words-with-bruce-wise-48/ You have my attention lol. I was really into this stuff in the past. Riemann is pretty much the best. He was implacable and really a genius beyond even what Einstein or anything seen in the 20th century I think. Had he lived longer, there’s just no telling what he could have done. I agree idolatry is something to watch out for, but it’s not new. We just have to read what Keats wrote in Sleep and Poetry. I wrote something specifically against this idolatry, which I just completed for Edgar Allan Poe’s upcoming birthday. It’s entitled: A Defense of Edgar Allan Poe’s Poetic Principle: Poetry’s Struggle in a “Contemporary” World. https://www.thechainedmuse.com/single-post/2018/01/16/A-Defense-of-Edgar-Allan-Poe%E2%80%99s-Poetic-Principle-Poetry%E2%80%99s-Struggle-in-a-%E2%80%9CContemporary%E2%80%9D-World Best to all, Dave Reply Uwe Carl Diebes January 17, 2018 The Schiller Monument by Uwe Carl Diebes “Bleib nur das Gerippe mir zurück.” —Friedrick Schiller, “Die Götter Giechenlands” The Schiller Monument, located in Gendarmenmarkt, in front of Konzerthaus, Berlin, is where it now is parked. The set of statues executed by Reinhold Begas surrounds a cube-shaped pedestal, on which the poet stands. The Nazis took the laureled dramatist down for parades, but later was restored, and missing pieces were replaced. The renovation was completed in Two-Thousand-Six, the statue stood again amidst the shapes below transfixed: grand History with tablet, Tragedy with mask face-sharp, Philosophy with scroll, and Lyric with a swan-topped harp. But Schiller is not here; he has gone with the Grecian gods; we only have an image of what once was…now is not. Reply James A. Tweedie January 18, 2018 Since Schiller’s poetry addresses both Valhalla and Elysia as idyllic locales for the life beyond, might it be equally appropriate to say that he has “gone with the Teutonic Gods.” After all, there is supposedly plenty of poetry ringing through the rafters in the great hall iof Valhalla, and (so far as I have heard) not a word of it in Greek! In any case, a lovely tribute to Schiller via his monument. I have enjoyed this thread and appreciate the grace and civility in which it has been maintained. Perhaps it is indeed true that “Music hath charms to soothe a savage breast.” After all, music and poetry are closely related. Carlyle may have believed that, “Music is well said to be the speech of angels,” but it may also be true that when angles sing, they recite poetry! Reply Leave a Reply Cancel Reply Your email address will not be published.CommentName* Email* Website Notify me of follow-up comments by email. Notify me of new posts by email. This site uses Akismet to reduce spam. Learn how your comment data is processed.