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      Fred McIlmoyle
      43 Posts


      So you’ve written a poem you say,
      After reading mine. Not so easy is it?
      Oh! you’ve written yours in rhyme.
      Um! that form`s considered – well
      A bit old fashioned now.
      Ah! you’ve let your feelings enter in,
      Oh no! – here, let me show you how.
      You choose an obscure, abstract theme,
      One few out there will understand;
      Say the philosophy of Kant,
      Or a few lines from the Koran.
      Never set a rhythmic flow, ensure the words collide,
      Avoid the telling metaphor or anything personified,
      That’s much much too clear; they might understand.
      You have to be original you know,
      More intellectual and abstruse.
      Toss in a foreign phrase or two
      That usually cooks their goose.
      Try to split the meter up, alter the length of lines,
      Shape your poem like a pyramid,
      Or some other symbolic sign.
      Never tell them what it means,
      There’s sure to be a Judas goat
      Who wants to appear intelligent;
      Remember the Emperor’s invisible coat!

    • #30261 Reply
      Mark Stone
      43 Posts

      Fred, Hello. My comments, which are based purely on my personal preferences, are as follows.

      1. I see many rhymes, but I can’t identify a consistent rhyme scheme. I’m not suggesting you have to have a consistent rhyme scheme. I just prefer it.

      2. The narrative is crystal clear and is clever, and it is told in a folksy and engaging manner.

      3. I note the absence of a consistent meter, but it does not appear you were striving for that.

      4. I very much like the “words collide/personified” rhyme.

      Best wishes. Mark

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