"A Lady in a Lilac Dress with Flowers" by Władysław Czachórski‘A Spot in Time’ by Theresa Rodriguez The Society April 20, 2019 Beauty, Love Poems, Poetry 2 Comments It is a moment or a spot in time, When time is quieted and put away; A simple thing becoming the sublime, Suspended and eternal in a day And all around me just dissolves to naught; I feel my world around me disappears; It is just me before you—I am caught Between my happiness and many fears. You look at me as if you’ve known before All that I am in heart and soul and mind, Or wish to know them, here and now and more: These gazes that reveal and seek entwined. For then I look up and I realize I get lost when I look into your eyes. Theresa Rodriguez is the author of Jesus and Eros: Sonnets, Poems and Songs. She also has put together a chapbook of 37 sonnets which is available as an ebook on amazon.com. NOTE TO READERS: If you enjoyed this poem or other content, please consider making a donation to the Society of Classical Poets. The Society of Classical Poets does not endorse any views expressed in individual poems or commentary. Trending now: 2 Responses Joseph S. Salemi April 20, 2019 This is a very fine sonnet, Shakespearean not just in form but also in its acute psychologizing. Line 12 (“These gazes that reveal and seek entwined”) is a clear allusion to the Renaissance notion that the “eye-beams” of two potential lovers can entangle and entrap their souls in helpless mutual adoration. My only suggestion is that in line 7 there should be a dash after /you/, not a comma, since two separate independent clauses are involved. Normally I’d suggest a semicolon, but since there is already one in line 6 the dash would be more appropriate. Reply Theresa Rodriguez April 20, 2019 Thank you Professor Salemi for your comments and your punctuation suggestion for line 7. I have requested Evan to update it. Your appreciation means the world to me! Reply Leave a Reply Cancel ReplyYour email address will not be published.CommentName* Email* Website Δ This site uses Akismet to reduce spam. Learn how your comment data is processed.
Joseph S. Salemi April 20, 2019 This is a very fine sonnet, Shakespearean not just in form but also in its acute psychologizing. Line 12 (“These gazes that reveal and seek entwined”) is a clear allusion to the Renaissance notion that the “eye-beams” of two potential lovers can entangle and entrap their souls in helpless mutual adoration. My only suggestion is that in line 7 there should be a dash after /you/, not a comma, since two separate independent clauses are involved. Normally I’d suggest a semicolon, but since there is already one in line 6 the dash would be more appropriate. Reply
Theresa Rodriguez April 20, 2019 Thank you Professor Salemi for your comments and your punctuation suggestion for line 7. I have requested Evan to update it. Your appreciation means the world to me! Reply