"Rebuilding the Antwerp Steen" by Jan Jacob Croegaert-Van Bree‘Repaired’ by Dean Z. Douthat The Society November 16, 2022 Beauty, Love Poems, Poetry 12 Comments . Repaired Debris drifts down my lacrimosa stream shards discarded when my life exploded. Her cheating ripped apart my every seam left a rubble heap she soon unloaded. Finding all my parts, your love resummed them rebuilt a greater whole, I now can cope. Quelling restive fears, your love benumbed them. I set a brand-new goal; I now dare hope. Never could I guess that you’d redeem me regenerate my wounded dying soul. Never thought I’d see my true love dream be produced till you assumed the starring role. Not dreaming now, I’m wide-awake tonight. So, take a bow, your love has set me right. . . Dean Z. Douthat is a retired engineer residing in a senior living facility in Ann Arbor, Michigan. NOTE TO READERS: If you enjoyed this poem or other content, please consider making a donation to the Society of Classical Poets. The Society of Classical Poets does not endorse any views expressed in individual poems or commentary. Trending now: 12 Responses Russel Winick November 16, 2022 Nice. Heart-warming. Well-done. So glad that you have someone assuming the starting role. Reply jd November 16, 2022 Loved this lamentation with a happy ending. Very well done, in my opinion. Reply Cheryl Corey November 16, 2022 Dean, I enjoyed reading your sonnet. Keep them coming! Reply sally cook November 16, 2022 I would like to see more of your thoughtful, wellk considered work. Reply g.KayeNaegele November 16, 2022 Well done and moving sonnet, Enjoyed the redemptive element. Reply Margaret Coats November 16, 2022 Impressive building of sonnet structure using all the tools: precise words, sound effects including masterful rhymes, well-chosen images, more than one theme supporting the main idea, and regular rhythmic lines (they carefully begin with a stress only when there is a feminine ending). Take a bow! Reply C.B. Anderson November 21, 2022 Which essentially renders such lines trochaic, Margaret, a very interesting ploy to maintain and sustain impeccable rhythm. Reply Cynthia Erlandson November 17, 2022 The imagery and metaphor of the first quatrain is especially impressive! The poem is very moving. Reply Joseph S. Salemi November 17, 2022 When I read the first line of quatrain 2, I thought the word ‘resummed” was a misspelling of “resumed.” It made no sense that way, but after another reading I guessed that you meant “re-summed,” which is confirmed by the rhyme with “benumbed.” It might make sense to spell the word as “re-summed,” with a hyphen, to avoid confusing readers. No hyphen is needed in the word “benumbed,” since that is the traditional orthography. Reply C.B Anderson November 18, 2022 Excellent point, Joseph, but I would also like to remind Dean that the usage of “’til” in line 12 is unnecessary and downright silly. We already have, in the English language, the word “till,” which means the same thing as “until.” I can scarcely say how many times this point has been made here on this site. Reply Dean Z Douthat November 24, 2022 I was unaware of that usage of ’till’. Thanks for the education. I will make the change. Dean Z Douthat November 24, 2022 Thanks for the suggestion, Joseph. I’ll make that change Reply Leave a Reply Cancel ReplyYour email address will not be published.CommentName* Email* Website Δ This site uses Akismet to reduce spam. Learn how your comment data is processed.
Russel Winick November 16, 2022 Nice. Heart-warming. Well-done. So glad that you have someone assuming the starting role. Reply
jd November 16, 2022 Loved this lamentation with a happy ending. Very well done, in my opinion. Reply
sally cook November 16, 2022 I would like to see more of your thoughtful, wellk considered work. Reply
Margaret Coats November 16, 2022 Impressive building of sonnet structure using all the tools: precise words, sound effects including masterful rhymes, well-chosen images, more than one theme supporting the main idea, and regular rhythmic lines (they carefully begin with a stress only when there is a feminine ending). Take a bow! Reply
C.B. Anderson November 21, 2022 Which essentially renders such lines trochaic, Margaret, a very interesting ploy to maintain and sustain impeccable rhythm. Reply
Cynthia Erlandson November 17, 2022 The imagery and metaphor of the first quatrain is especially impressive! The poem is very moving. Reply
Joseph S. Salemi November 17, 2022 When I read the first line of quatrain 2, I thought the word ‘resummed” was a misspelling of “resumed.” It made no sense that way, but after another reading I guessed that you meant “re-summed,” which is confirmed by the rhyme with “benumbed.” It might make sense to spell the word as “re-summed,” with a hyphen, to avoid confusing readers. No hyphen is needed in the word “benumbed,” since that is the traditional orthography. Reply
C.B Anderson November 18, 2022 Excellent point, Joseph, but I would also like to remind Dean that the usage of “’til” in line 12 is unnecessary and downright silly. We already have, in the English language, the word “till,” which means the same thing as “until.” I can scarcely say how many times this point has been made here on this site. Reply
Dean Z Douthat November 24, 2022 I was unaware of that usage of ’till’. Thanks for the education. I will make the change.
