Jean Pelham‘Flushing with Anger in a Rest Room’ by Frank De Canio The Society August 27, 2017 Humor, Poetry 2 Comments I may as well be hired as his maid, the way I’m made to clean his toilet seat. Still worse, the only way I’m getting paid is that by cleaning the commode I treat myself to one as dry as that he pissed upon when targeting the toilet bowl with urinary fusillades that missed! But wanting disinfecting alcohol, I’m wiping dry the saturated seat with the acidic fluid that resigned me to redress his penchant to excrete the stuff without regard for my behind. If talk concerning urine seems unfit then pity those who have to sit on it. Frank De Canio was born and bred in New Jersey, and works in New York. NOTE: The Society considers this page, where your poetry resides, to be your residence as well, where you may invite family, friends, and others to visit. Feel free to treat this page as your home and remove anyone here who disrespects you. Simply send an email to email@example.com. Put “Remove Comment” in the subject line and list which comments you would like removed. The Society does not endorse any views expressed in individual poems or comments and reserves the right to remove any comments to maintain the decorum of this website and the integrity of the Society. Please see our Comments Policy here. Share this:Click to share on Twitter (Opens in new window)Click to share on Facebook (Opens in new window)Click to print (Opens in new window)Click to share on LinkedIn (Opens in new window)Click to share on WhatsApp (Opens in new window)Click to email this to a friend (Opens in new window)Click to share on Pinterest (Opens in new window) 2 Responses Joseph S. Salemi August 28, 2017 A cute comic poem! My only problem is with lines 9, 10, and 11, where the diction and syntax become just a little too dense and complicated. If that section could be streamlined a bit, the poem’s flow would be smoother. The words “acidic fluid,” “resigned,” “redress,” and “penchant” are where things get tangled up. Reply Frank De Canio August 28, 2017 Thanks for the comments Joseph. I think you’re right. I’d just rather add that I will change the lines “that he pissed upon when targeting the toilet bowl” to “that he pissed on when he targeted the toilet bowl” ‘upon’ sounds a bit too precious? or awkward?, whatever the case may be. Reply Leave a Reply Cancel ReplyYour email address will not be published.CommentName* Email* Website Notify me of follow-up comments by email. Notify me of new posts by email. This site uses Akismet to reduce spam. Learn how your comment data is processed.