Jean Pelham‘Flushing with Anger in a Rest Room’ by Frank De Canio The Society August 27, 2017 Humor, Poetry 2 Comments I may as well be hired as his maid, the way I’m made to clean his toilet seat. Still worse, the only way I’m getting paid is that by cleaning the commode I treat myself to one as dry as that he pissed upon when targeting the toilet bowl with urinary fusillades that missed! But wanting disinfecting alcohol, I’m wiping dry the saturated seat with the acidic fluid that resigned me to redress his penchant to excrete the stuff without regard for my behind. If talk concerning urine seems unfit then pity those who have to sit on it. Frank De Canio was born and bred in New Jersey, and works in New York. Views expressed by individual poets and writers on this website and by commenters do not represent the views of the entire Society. The comments section on regular posts is meant to be a place for civil and fruitful discussion. Pseudonyms are discouraged. The individual poet or writer featured in a post has the ability to remove any or all comments by emailing submissions@ classicalpoets.org with the details and under the subject title “Remove Comment.” Share this:Click to share on Twitter (Opens in new window)Click to share on Facebook (Opens in new window) Related 2 Responses Joseph S. Salemi August 28, 2017 A cute comic poem! My only problem is with lines 9, 10, and 11, where the diction and syntax become just a little too dense and complicated. If that section could be streamlined a bit, the poem’s flow would be smoother. The words “acidic fluid,” “resigned,” “redress,” and “penchant” are where things get tangled up. Reply Frank De Canio August 28, 2017 Thanks for the comments Joseph. I think you’re right. I’d just rather add that I will change the lines “that he pissed upon when targeting the toilet bowl” to “that he pissed on when he targeted the toilet bowl” ‘upon’ sounds a bit too precious? or awkward?, whatever the case may be. Reply Leave a Reply Cancel Reply Your email address will not be published.CommentName* Email* Website Notify me of follow-up comments by email. Notify me of new posts by email. This site uses Akismet to reduce spam. Learn how your comment data is processed.