"Lady Grantham" by George RomneyTwo Humorous Poems by R.G. Kaimal The Society September 21, 2018 Humor, Poetry 4 Comments Woman: Why choose the red dress, dear? Reply: To me it’s really white, To you it should be clear, Mood sets a color right! Boy: Are you playing handball? Reply: No! In fact it’s football. Since leaving our big eggs We’re quadrupeds on two legs! R.G. Kaimal is a write living in Bangalore, India. Views expressed by individual poets and writers on this website and by commenters do not represent the views of the entire Society. The comments section on regular posts is meant to be a place for civil and fruitful discussion. Pseudonyms are discouraged. The individual poet or writer featured in a post has the ability to remove any or all comments by emailing submissions@ classicalpoets.org with the details and under the subject title “Remove Comment.” Share this:Click to share on Twitter (Opens in new window)Click to share on Facebook (Opens in new window) Related 4 Responses Joe Tessitore September 21, 2018 Humorous indeed, and a very welcome way to start the day! Many thanks! Reply Dr. Shiny Titus September 21, 2018 That was fun to read!!! Reply Mark Stone September 22, 2018 R.G. Hello. I have three comments. First, I like the idea of a conversational exchange between a man and a woman in a poem. It reminds me of the song “Baby It’s Cold Outside.” Second, because of the space between “dear” and “clear,” the rhyme did not resonate with me that strongly. In a conversation poem, I would have a rhyme in each segment of the conversation. Third, if you have colorful language in a conversation between a male and a female, it might make some readers more comfortable if you identify the speakers as Wife and Husband, rather than Girl and Boy, for example. Here is what I have in mind: Wife: Iamb, iamb, iamb, iamb, rhyme A Iamb, iamb, iamb, iamb, rhyme A Husband: Iamb, iamb, iamb, iamb, rhyme B Iamb, iamb, iamb, iamb, rhyme B Of course, poems are not always intended to make the reader comfortable. It depends on your objective. Thank you for sharing your poems with us! Reply David Hollywood September 25, 2018 Lovely, light poetry Reply Leave a Reply Cancel Reply Your email address will not be published.CommentName* Email* Website Notify me of follow-up comments by email. Notify me of new posts by email. This site uses Akismet to reduce spam. Learn how your comment data is processed.