"American Circus in France" by Frederic Arthur BridgmanThree Limericks by Nivedita Karthik The Society October 10, 2018 Children's, Humor, Poetry 11 Comments An acrobat named Larry Loops was best among all circus troupes, But he quit one day and was heard to say, “My boss made me jump all those hoops!” There once was a man from Keele who slipped on an orange peel. He fractured his foot and was told to stay put on account of his Achilles’ heel. There was a young girl named Lottie whose sneaking was so very naughty. She met a Jasmine— her friend in quarantine— and came back to home red and spotty. Nivedita Karthik is a graduate in Integrated Immunology from the University of Oxford who likes reading books and travelling. She is an accomplished Bharatanatyam dancer and has given many performances. She loves any form of creative writing (especially poems) and writes them whenever she can. Views expressed by individual poets and writers on this website and by commenters do not represent the views of the entire Society. The comments section on regular posts is meant to be a place for civil and fruitful discussion. Pseudonyms are discouraged. The individual poet or writer featured in a post has the ability to remove any or all comments by emailing submissions@ classicalpoets.org with the details and under the subject title “Remove Comment.” Share this:Click to share on Twitter (Opens in new window)Click to share on Facebook (Opens in new window) 11 Responses Edgar October 10, 2018 I really enjoy the anti-humor of the first two. The unresolved tension of a set-up without a payoff is delectable. Reply Shiny Titus October 10, 2018 Very nice!! Reply Joseph S. Salemi October 10, 2018 The first two limericks work, but the third could use some polishing. The name Jasmine (in American pronunciation at least) is JAZZ-min. It can’t rhyme with quarantine. Also, the first line seems to miss a syllable. I’d suggest this: There was a young lady named Lottie Whose sneaking was so very naughty. She met Geraldine Who was in quarantine And came back to home red and spotty. Moreover, in limericks every line should begin with capitalization. The genre is ferociously formal, and free-verse posturing should be excluded from it. Reply CARL MANN October 10, 2018 I liked the first two limericks, but felt the third needed work! This is how I would change it. There once was a girl named Lottie. Whose speaking came out of the pottie. She met young Geraldine, who is now in quarantine. Now Lottie is naughty and spotty. Reply C.B. Anderson October 10, 2018 What is it that you do not understand about anapestic metrical feet, which is what drives the Limerick? duh duh DAH should be recurrent in every line. For example: A reporter assigned Terre Haute Came awake with a pen in her throat. Since her lover had fled And had left her for dead, On her pillowcase “Murder” she wrote. or, An importer of cheese in Chicago With an underdeveloped imago, Even though he knew better, Blew a sneeze on some cheddar And re-labeled it fresh Asiago. [These are two reprints from the five limericks published in Parody Journal as “North Coast Suite”] Joe is absolutely correct in his insistence on formal ferocity when it comes to short forms such as the limerick. Reply Roger October 11, 2018 I find teaching someone is especially effective when you start with “what is it that you do not understand?” The condescension really brings out a willingness to learn, Reply Roger October 11, 2018 *learn. C.B. Anderson October 11, 2018 I detect a note of irony here. I’ve never claimed to be a great educator, and I am particularly annoyed by avoidable shortfallings. So what am I to do? Simply stifle my feelings on something that is near and dear to my heart? Roger October 12, 2018 I feel there is an opportunity to use your passion as a lamppost to lead the author to gain a stronger grasp of meter. Perhaps I, too, was a bit brusque with my comment, but I feel that great writing comes from great mentorship and constructive criticism; dismissiveness often breeds abandonment. C.B. Anderson October 12, 2018 I don’t know, Roger. Although I might agree with you in principle and in theory, I’m not sure my temperament is up to it. In any case, great writing probably comes from native talent and rigorous attention to detail. You can’t polish a sneaker, and novitiates should not shy from the lash. Reply Nivedita Karthik August 16, 2019 Hello everyone, Thank you for all your comments and constructive criticisms on my work. I will definitely take these into consideration going forward. Sorry for the delay in response, I was going through a tough time personally. Reply Leave a Reply Cancel Reply Your email address will not be published.CommentName* Email* Website Notify me of follow-up comments by email. Notify me of new posts by email. This site uses Akismet to reduce spam. Learn how your comment data is processed.