"Apple Blossoms" by John Everett Millais‘Apple Tree’ by Mickey Kulp The Society July 24, 2019 Beauty, Poetry 2 Comments a modified English Alexandrine An ancient apple tree in my unkempt backyard Has skin pocked like the moon by savage nature’s wrath. The top is bare and broke, curled like a parched mesquite Contorted in hot sand. Some lower limbs are green. These few remember still How coiling teenaged roots went questing, drinking deep. Swayed easy in the storms, and limber, shed the snows. Tomorrow had no cares. Untouched, enduring still. The few lush limbs oppose Death creeping from above. They birth a crop of fruit: Green scandal, tart with life. Defiance ‘til the end. A lesson, might it be? Mickey Kulp is a writer and father whose creative nonfiction, fiction, and poetry have appeared in numerous consumer magazines, newspapers, literary journals, and three books of poetry. He is a member of the Gwinnett County Writers Guild and founding member of the Snellville Writers Group. In 2018, he created a quarterly reading series to benefit the local food co-op. He lives with his wife and a dozen larcenous squirrels in Atlanta, GA. NOTE TO READERS: If you enjoyed this poem or other content, please consider making a donation to the Society of Classical Poets. The Society of Classical Poets does not endorse any views expressed in individual poems or commentary. ***Read Our Comments Policy Here*** 2 Responses Joseph S. Salemi July 24, 2019 It’s nice to see alexandrines being composed once more. They were frequently used in the late nineteenth century, but they demand a skill that is largely absent today. My only suggestion is about the choriambic bob-lines that end each quatrain. The first two “Contorted in hot sand” and “Tomorrow had no cares” work fine. But the last has a small stress problem. “A lesson, might it be?” is very awkward for a choriamb (/ x x /), since the stress naturally fall on the word “it,” which is unnatural. I’d suggest this minor shift: A lesson it might be.” (x / x x / x) In this way the stress falls on “might”, and the unnecessary sentimental question at the end can be omitted. Reply Mickey Kulp August 1, 2019 Thanks for the feedback. ~Mick Reply Leave a Reply Cancel ReplyYour email address will not be published.CommentName* Email* Website Notify me of followup comments via e-mail. You can also subscribe without commenting. Δ This site uses Akismet to reduce spam. Learn how your comment data is processed.
Joseph S. Salemi July 24, 2019 It’s nice to see alexandrines being composed once more. They were frequently used in the late nineteenth century, but they demand a skill that is largely absent today. My only suggestion is about the choriambic bob-lines that end each quatrain. The first two “Contorted in hot sand” and “Tomorrow had no cares” work fine. But the last has a small stress problem. “A lesson, might it be?” is very awkward for a choriamb (/ x x /), since the stress naturally fall on the word “it,” which is unnatural. I’d suggest this minor shift: A lesson it might be.” (x / x x / x) In this way the stress falls on “might”, and the unnecessary sentimental question at the end can be omitted. Reply
