Photo of daffodils in snow by Mike Pennington‘Daffodils in the Snow’ by Shari Jo LeKane The Society March 19, 2021 Beauty, Poetry 16 Comments . Memories frozen in pinnacles glow, tattooed in lingering beauty and sorrow now fade by the light of forgotten tomorrows with nowhere to go, yet so much to show, like daffodils in the snow. Delicate structures that sway to and fro, in heather green meadows that earth merely borrows for sprouting the fields of both yarrow and farro. Despite all the lows, they continue to grow, like daffodils in the snow. And what of the tulips that bloom all too soon? The trees and the bees caught in freeze stop to rest. Wintering birds sing their summery tunes and are suddenly silenced when building their nests. Snowflakes start flying in March’s full moon, yet the lone golden daffodil weathers it best. . . Shari Jo LeKane lives in St. Louis, Missouri, writes poetry, prose and articles, and specializes in literary criticism, creative writing, Spanish Language and culture, business and community development, educational and leadership development, non-profit matters, disability, elderly care and advocacy. She has a B.A. in English, Spanish, an M.A. in Spanish from Saint Louis University in Madrid and St. Louis, and additional certifications. She teaches Spanish at an HBCU in St. Louis, Missouri, and Creative Writing and Poetry. Shari’s poetry has been published in literary magazines worldwide. NOTE: The Society considers this page, where your poetry resides, to be your residence as well, where you may invite family, friends, and others to visit. Feel free to treat this page as your home and remove anyone here who disrespects you. Simply send an email to firstname.lastname@example.org. Put “Remove Comment” in the subject line and list which comments you would like removed. The Society does not endorse any views expressed in individual poems or comments and reserves the right to remove any comments to maintain the decorum of this website and the integrity of the Society. Please see our Comments Policy here. Share this:Click to share on Twitter (Opens in new window)Click to share on Facebook (Opens in new window)Click to print (Opens in new window)Click to share on LinkedIn (Opens in new window)Click to share on WhatsApp (Opens in new window)Click to email this to a friend (Opens in new window)Click to share on Pinterest (Opens in new window) 16 Responses Allegra Silberstein March 19, 2021 Beautiful poem. Thank you! Reply Shari Jo LeKane March 19, 2021 Thank you, Allegra! Reply Daniel Blackston March 19, 2021 Nicely done! Reply Shari Jo LeKane March 19, 2021 Thank you, Daniel. Reply Yael March 19, 2021 I love how your interesting rhyming scheme tells this story in a way that’s reminiscent of walking down a winding garden path to see the familiar scene which you are describing, to which anyone who’s ever had a garden can easily relate. Well done and very engaging. Reply Shari Jo LeKane March 20, 2021 Thank you, Yael. Reply Leslie Howell March 19, 2021 Very beautiful Shari. You remind me of last weeks daffodils, it was never said better then in this poem. Reply Shari Jo LeKane March 20, 2021 Thank you, Leslie. Reply an'ya March 20, 2021 Dear Shari Jo, what a wonderful poem that I enjoyed very much. It changes from verse to verse yet doesn’t lose the rhythm or the point. Thank you, an’ya Reply Shari Jo LeKane March 20, 2021 Thank you, an’ya. Reply Margaret Coats March 20, 2021 As Yael says, your rhyme scheme is interesting–even fascinating in its complexity. I’ve remembered at last where I saw something similar (but not the same!). Edmund Gosse published a book entitled “On Viol and Flute” in 1873, and in it he has a lyric sequence called “Fortunate Love in Sonnets and Rondels.” The poems have 14, 15, or 16 lines, with longer ones including a rentrement or refrain such as you have in lines 5 and 10 above. And of course you have the typical 14 lines of a sonnet here, if I ignore your refrains. If I also ignore the “s” ending some of your rhyme words, your rhyme scheme is aaaaA aaaaA bcbcbc. The final sestet is standard Petrarchan, but the ten previous lines on a single end rhyme sound represent a real tour-de-force in English, especially as there are some internal rhymes, too. I don’t recall that Gosse ever attempts anything quite like this poem. He puts a narrative in his sequence, which means that he must offer events/scenes that the reader can put together as parts of a whole. Yael finds a story in “Daffodils in the Snow,” but it is mainly a descriptive story of a garden walk, made up of successive impressions, followed by some more reflective suggestions for thought in the final sestet. Good use of rhyme to effect the “turn” in this meditative poem which is not quite a sonnet! And by the way, if you are interested in what Gosse did, his book is easy to find at Internet Archive. Reply Shari Jo LeKane March 20, 2021 Thank you, Margaret, for your insightful interpretations and analysis. I wrote this metaphorical representation comparing the dichotomies of spring (daffodils in the snow) to other metaphysical contemplations of the cyclical nature of life, memories, rebirth, and eternity – originally styled as a Petrarchan Sonnet. However, the unconventional extension or rentrement repeated in lines 5 and 10, “like daffodils in the snow”, as you noted, are much more reminiscent of the Rondeau. I am familiar with Edmund Gosse, and there is no doubt that these classic styles influence and define what I consider Modern Formalism in my writing. Thanks again! Reply Shari Jo LeKane March 20, 2021 The Petrarchan rhyme scheme I used is abbaA, abbaA, cdcdcd. Reply Margaret Coats March 20, 2021 Right–I was oversimplifying by neglecting accent on the feminine rhymes. James Sale March 21, 2021 I really enjoyed reading this; it has a wistful beauty, and the weaving of the rhymes is very skilful. Well done. Reply Shari Jo LeKane March 21, 2021 Thank you, James. Reply Leave a Reply Cancel ReplyYour email address will not be published.CommentName* Email* Website Notify me of follow-up comments by email. Notify me of new posts by email. This site uses Akismet to reduce spam. Learn how your comment data is processed.