19th century photo of a snowflake by Wilson Bentley‘A Snowflake’ and Other Poetry by Jacky Pun The Society May 26, 2021 Beauty, Haiku and Senryu, Poetry 12 Comments . Haiku A grounded sparrow Wings hurt, head raised to the sky “Is this how I die?” . . A Snowflake From sky’s descent and earthward bound, __A snowflake, small and bright; It’s slow and steady, floating down, Until he lands without a sound, __And shrouds the dirt with white. And there he lies in nightly gloom, __Among such flakes alike; Above, he sees bright specks that loom, The shining stars, beyond the moon, __Like lucent snow in flight. With solemn gaze, in deepest thought, __He questions winter’s call; But in his mind, the answer sought, Demure and grieved, he finds it naught, __“To earth, why did I fall?” . . Jacky Pun is a classical dancer living in New York. NOTE TO READERS: If you enjoyed this poem or other content, please consider making a donation to the Society of Classical Poets. The Society of Classical Poets does not endorse any views expressed in individual poems or commentary. 12 Responses Paul Freeman May 26, 2021 ‘I could have been a contender’, from the point of view of a snowflake. This poem is crazily brilliant and somewhat melancholy. As for the sparrow; again, a poignant read, melancholic read. Thanks for chance to see your work, Jacky. Reply Allegra Silberstein May 26, 2021 Your poems touch the heart…thank you… Allegra Reply Ryan Watch May 26, 2021 What a delightful pair of snappy poems! The second poem in particular had my fingers tapping to the rhythmic (and almost danceable) meter. Again, in regards to your second poem, I also admire the way you juxtaposed the concepts of a falling snowflake with hints of existential thought which can be implied by the last five lines of the poem: With solemn gaze, in deepest thought, __He questions winter’s call; But in his mind, the answer sought, Demure and grieved, he finds it naught, __“To earth, why did I fall?” I like the subtle symbolism that you have added in your poems. It makes them all the more profound and poignant than simply pleasurable. To answer the question of the eponymous snowflake of your poem, I composed a few verses of my own in response. Among the freshly fallen snow, Winter puts all to right The snowflake laments soft and low, “Why did I fall to earth below?” “You’re meant to disappear in snow, To blanket earth in white.” Reply Gail May 26, 2021 Beautiful work–too sad to consume in large doses. I particularly enjoyed the likening of stars to lucent snow in flight. I’ll remember that from now on. Reply paul buchheit May 26, 2021 Jacky, ‘Snowflake’ conjures up some great imagery — and philosophy! Nicely done. Reply Joe Tessitore May 26, 2021 This is wonderful, wonderful poetry! Well done Jacky Pun! Reply Daniel Kemper May 26, 2021 Origin-dysphoria! Poor old snowflake… Reply Cynthia Erlandson May 26, 2021 I love your imagery that shows the reflection of the snowflakes on the ground, in the sky filled with stars! Reply C.B. Anderson May 26, 2021 Flair, without substance, is how I would describe these. Reply Jacky Pun May 31, 2021 Please elaborate. I know this comment to be true. Pray, be frank. Reply Cheryl Corey May 27, 2021 What an interesting concept – to write from the perspective of the snowflake. Reply Jacky Pun May 31, 2021 Thank you all for reading. Thank you all for commenting. But I cannot receive these comments without first thanking my mentor Mr. Mantyk. Reply Leave a Reply Cancel ReplyYour email address will not be published.CommentName* Email* Website Δ This site uses Akismet to reduce spam. Learn how your comment data is processed.
Paul Freeman May 26, 2021 ‘I could have been a contender’, from the point of view of a snowflake. This poem is crazily brilliant and somewhat melancholy. As for the sparrow; again, a poignant read, melancholic read. Thanks for chance to see your work, Jacky. Reply
Ryan Watch May 26, 2021 What a delightful pair of snappy poems! The second poem in particular had my fingers tapping to the rhythmic (and almost danceable) meter. Again, in regards to your second poem, I also admire the way you juxtaposed the concepts of a falling snowflake with hints of existential thought which can be implied by the last five lines of the poem: With solemn gaze, in deepest thought, __He questions winter’s call; But in his mind, the answer sought, Demure and grieved, he finds it naught, __“To earth, why did I fall?” I like the subtle symbolism that you have added in your poems. It makes them all the more profound and poignant than simply pleasurable. To answer the question of the eponymous snowflake of your poem, I composed a few verses of my own in response. Among the freshly fallen snow, Winter puts all to right The snowflake laments soft and low, “Why did I fall to earth below?” “You’re meant to disappear in snow, To blanket earth in white.” Reply
Gail May 26, 2021 Beautiful work–too sad to consume in large doses. I particularly enjoyed the likening of stars to lucent snow in flight. I’ll remember that from now on. Reply
paul buchheit May 26, 2021 Jacky, ‘Snowflake’ conjures up some great imagery — and philosophy! Nicely done. Reply
Cynthia Erlandson May 26, 2021 I love your imagery that shows the reflection of the snowflakes on the ground, in the sky filled with stars! Reply
Cheryl Corey May 27, 2021 What an interesting concept – to write from the perspective of the snowflake. Reply
Jacky Pun May 31, 2021 Thank you all for reading. Thank you all for commenting. But I cannot receive these comments without first thanking my mentor Mr. Mantyk. Reply
