Four Sonnets on Traditional Dance, by Evan Mantyk The Society November 18, 2021 Beauty, Culture, Homer, Poetry 19 Comments . I. The Blacksmith God Forges Scenes on Achilles’ Shield after Homer’s Iliad Book 18 The hammer strikes! And glowing sparks fly out As Earth takes shape and then the flowing seas, The sun, the moon, the wondrous Pleiades And all the constellations round about. The hammer strikes! And now the god makes cities, Also countryside where joy and sadness Battle back and forth: war’s bloody madness Here and there a farmer sings sweet ditties. Then crowning all of man’s experience, He forges dance—the gracefulness and skill Of matching inner art with muscles’ will To spin and leap with poised exuberance. This gem of civilization now in place, His gift is taken to the human race. . . II. The Ark of God Enters Jerusalem after the Second Book of Samuel Chapter 6 Excitement fills the city as the Ark of God arrives. This golden chest contains The Laws—those Moses earlier obtains— And such a weighty moment can’t but spark King David to commence ecstatic dance And summon music paying homage to The workings of the faith he knows is true. His limbs rise up and move in rhythm’s trance. The last king’s daughter sees and says with spiteful jealousy, “Are you a king or servant? Have you no shame to leap about so fervent?” But David is unfazed—his praise is rightful. For God will punish her with barrenness And show dance is a proper way to bless. . . III. One Evening at the Palace of Versailles March, 1661 Disappointment clouds the Sun King’s heart, Obscuring heavenly frescos and palace walls; It dulls his fountains’ crystal waterfalls And casts strange shapes on sculpted garden art. The Hall of Mirrors seems to trap the soul Instead of helping to expand its view. His whisper flies on wings, “This can’t be true”; He mourns each dancer who can’t play the role Of Christian king nor highborn nobleman Nor awe the crowds in any public place Because—although they dance with noble grace On Versailles’s stage—they are but common men. Then crash! A bolt illuminates the hall. “I’ll make a ballet school and show them all.” . . IV. Shen Yun Performs at the Detroit Opera House October, 2021 Through haunted streets abandoned by the past They come, dressed well and driving gleaming cars Avoiding spots that drug-fueled crime still mars; Then make it to the opera house at last. They find their seats and watch the curtain rise, Revealing maidens flowing as if one Big piece of wind-whisked silk, and men who run And boldly leap to fly before the eyes. They bring to life the legends, far off cultures, That inspire, bewilder, and delight And tell the tale of China’s current plight: Traditions once divine rescued from vultures, Wolves, and statists long deranged. The crowd Can sense there’s hope, applauding long and loud. . . Evan Mantyk teaches literature and history in New York and is President of the Society of Classical Poets. NOTE TO READERS: If you enjoyed this poem or other content, please consider making a donation to the Society of Classical Poets. The Society of Classical Poets does not endorse any views expressed in individual poems or commentary. 19 Responses Cynthia Erlandson November 18, 2021 Lovely descriptions of the magic of dance, Evan! My favorite line, though sad in its poignance, is “Through haunted streets abandoned by the past”. And there are many others, like “matching inner art with muscles’ will”; and the metaphor of the Sun King’s disappointment as a cloud, with your descriptions of all of the scenery clouded by it. Reply jd November 18, 2021 Enjoyed all four! Thank you, Evan. Reply Joseph S. Salemi November 18, 2021 Dance, as William Butler Yeats knew, is one of the strongest symbols of human creative energy, of desire, and of the sheer superabundant force of life. I think of his lines about Solomon, whom “Sheba led a-dance,” or the leaping movement of “that dolphin-torn, that gong-tormented sea.” Note that Mr. Mantyk’s four poems are presented as historical stages: the ancient world in Hephaistos making the shield of Achilleus; the biblical world in the Ark of the Covenant; the post-Renaissance world in the Sun King’s Versailles; and the modern world, with the hopeful revival of parts of China’s ancient heritage. These are serious and historically rooted poems. Reply Yael November 18, 2021 What a great thematic romp through a wide spread of human history and culture! I like how it’s all woven together, literally dancing around the central theme in graceful harmony like a world fair exhibition. My favorite rhyme which entertains my mind is “villain” with “bearing children”. Reply Paul Freeman November 18, 2021 Thanks for the reads, Evan. I read in reverse order. The middle of the 4th sonnet brought to mind the exuberant dance scene in A Christmas Carol at Fezziwig’s shindig, one of my favourite scenes in literature. Reply Brian Yapko November 18, 2021 Evan, what a delightful and intriguing offering of sonnets! Each of these poems is a stunning representation of a different period in history and your ability to evoke each era with language is pure magic. Of the four, my favorite is “The Ark of God” with its depictions of David’s ecstacy and humility in stark contrast to Michal’s scornful pride. The rhymes of “fervent” and “servant” work so well in this context. I also greatly enjoyed “Palace at Versailles” and the slightly wry humor that informs the Sun King’s character. So many good images and rhymes in all of these poems, (“vultures” and “cultures” in Shen Yun is just fantastic!) As for form, I am intrigued, All four of these are sonnets but in a form I did not recognize – abbacddceffegg (the first poem repeats the b rhyme instead of the new c rhyme, but I’m not sure that switch is consequential.) A poetry site Mr. Google referred me to calls this a “Hybrid” Sonnet form as between Italian and English. Is that right? More to the point, what I take away from your choice to use the same atypical rhyme scheme in all four poems is that you have offered a subtle structural metaphor for the continuity of dance throughout history. Every age is different. But every age is the same. The effect is absolutely stunning. Thank you for a quite wonderful read. Reply Joseph S. Salemi November 18, 2021 The ABBA rhyme scheme is typical in the Petrarchan sonnet, but it is not as common in English quatrains. The Italian language rhymes very easily, but English does not, and therefore the ABBA scheme is harder to manage successfully in our poetry, since it tends to throw the reader off somewhat. I always advise my students to stick with ABAB quatrains when learning to write the sonnet. You need much experience and skill to handle the ABBA scheme. Reply Brian Yapko November 18, 2021 Very interesting. Thank you, Joseph, for the rhyme scheme insight. Reply James A. Tweedie November 18, 2021 Curiously, this sonnet form was what I was taught in high school when I was first introduced to formal poetry. I naively wrote sonnets in this form for thirty years before adopting the Shakespearean form as my default. I’m not convinced that the abbacddceffegg format is any more or less challenging that Shakespearean but I still revert to it from time to time with what I believe is good effect. Petrarchan is, of course, most challenging for reasons Dr. S. explains. SCPs Peter Harley had mastered a particularly challenging variation on the Petrarchan form (which concludes with a couplet) and rarely strays from it. Quite a feat. As for Evan’s dance sonnets, my favorite is the final effort. The form is perfect and the content, powerful–especially in the final six lines. Reply Margaret Coats November 29, 2021 As abab cdcd efef gg is simply the standard Shakespearean sonnet rhyme scheme, the scheme we see here (abba cddc effe gg) can be called the Shakespearean sonnet rhyme scheme with closed quatrains. Reply James Sale November 19, 2021 Very fine writing; I like the panoramic sweep of this as myths and world history focus on one point of interest: the dance, a cosmic concept as Dante, for one, clearly shows! Thanks! Reply Peter Hartley November 19, 2021 Evan – a great pleasure it was to read this quartet, ranging as it does from the world of the Ancient Greek to the Old Testament, thence to the Sun King’s Versailles and on to present-day China, and the four disparate ages all united by a consistent rhyme scheme. There are many little felicities in the writing, and if I could single one out it would be, “Revealing maidens flowing as if one / Big piece of wind-whisked silk.” But there are many more. Well done! Reply Cheryl Corey November 19, 2021 Quite an ambitious undertaking. My favorites are I. and IV. The totality of the poems stirred my imagination to wonder when & where the first attempts at dance occurred. Reply Damian Robin November 19, 2021 Wonderful — wonder full — amazing the way the internal spirit moves the human body to express what wells inside with joyful gesture. Like a march of time as well, one after the other, coming forward. The spark of life given traction in dance. None can stand against the power of dance and its inborn (and high born) exuberance. Well done, Evan. Reply C.B. Anderson November 20, 2021 All of these were well conceived and well executed. If I have a single quibble it is with the use of “make” in the last line of #3. Wouldn’t “build” or “start” be more to the point (and more idiomatic), depending on whether you mean “ballet school” as a building or an institution? Reply Evan Mantyk November 22, 2021 Thank you all for you comments! To C.B. Anderson, the language here is bounded by the history. Louis XIV (the Sun King) did a lot of building at Versailles, but he did not “build” a dance school. Also “start a ballet school” suggests that there were other ballet schools and he was perhaps opening a local branch. Louis XIV was creating the very first ballet school: the Royal Academy of Dance. Reply C.B. Anderson November 22, 2021 When you put it that way, “make” makes perfect sense. Reply Margaret Coats November 29, 2021 Evan, I am sorry to have taken so long to respond to this wonderful group. It is most interesting to see that the lame Hephaistos is credited with the invention of dance. The Versailles sonnet, with the idea that there should be a school of dance, takes an equally important step in the history of the art. Catherine de Medici had created very significant ballets, but they were all the court dances of varied individuals who were not professionals in the modern sense of educated artists. That first French school advanced the art of dance into its future. And now Shen Yun creates its truly amazing performances with the cooperation of dancers, musicians, costumers, and set designers who live and work closely together to present stories to which all of them are devoted. Reply Evan Mantyk December 1, 2021 Thank you, Margaret, for your insightful commentary! The irony of the lame god creating dance is interesting, though I didn’t intend that HE made it himself; only that dance is a gift from Heaven and that this ancient passage symbolizes that concept well. Reply Leave a Reply Cancel ReplyYour email address will not be published.CommentName* Email* Website Δ This site uses Akismet to reduce spam. Learn how your comment data is processed.
Cynthia Erlandson November 18, 2021 Lovely descriptions of the magic of dance, Evan! My favorite line, though sad in its poignance, is “Through haunted streets abandoned by the past”. And there are many others, like “matching inner art with muscles’ will”; and the metaphor of the Sun King’s disappointment as a cloud, with your descriptions of all of the scenery clouded by it. Reply
Joseph S. Salemi November 18, 2021 Dance, as William Butler Yeats knew, is one of the strongest symbols of human creative energy, of desire, and of the sheer superabundant force of life. I think of his lines about Solomon, whom “Sheba led a-dance,” or the leaping movement of “that dolphin-torn, that gong-tormented sea.” Note that Mr. Mantyk’s four poems are presented as historical stages: the ancient world in Hephaistos making the shield of Achilleus; the biblical world in the Ark of the Covenant; the post-Renaissance world in the Sun King’s Versailles; and the modern world, with the hopeful revival of parts of China’s ancient heritage. These are serious and historically rooted poems. Reply
Yael November 18, 2021 What a great thematic romp through a wide spread of human history and culture! I like how it’s all woven together, literally dancing around the central theme in graceful harmony like a world fair exhibition. My favorite rhyme which entertains my mind is “villain” with “bearing children”. Reply
Paul Freeman November 18, 2021 Thanks for the reads, Evan. I read in reverse order. The middle of the 4th sonnet brought to mind the exuberant dance scene in A Christmas Carol at Fezziwig’s shindig, one of my favourite scenes in literature. Reply
Brian Yapko November 18, 2021 Evan, what a delightful and intriguing offering of sonnets! Each of these poems is a stunning representation of a different period in history and your ability to evoke each era with language is pure magic. Of the four, my favorite is “The Ark of God” with its depictions of David’s ecstacy and humility in stark contrast to Michal’s scornful pride. The rhymes of “fervent” and “servant” work so well in this context. I also greatly enjoyed “Palace at Versailles” and the slightly wry humor that informs the Sun King’s character. So many good images and rhymes in all of these poems, (“vultures” and “cultures” in Shen Yun is just fantastic!) As for form, I am intrigued, All four of these are sonnets but in a form I did not recognize – abbacddceffegg (the first poem repeats the b rhyme instead of the new c rhyme, but I’m not sure that switch is consequential.) A poetry site Mr. Google referred me to calls this a “Hybrid” Sonnet form as between Italian and English. Is that right? More to the point, what I take away from your choice to use the same atypical rhyme scheme in all four poems is that you have offered a subtle structural metaphor for the continuity of dance throughout history. Every age is different. But every age is the same. The effect is absolutely stunning. Thank you for a quite wonderful read. Reply
Joseph S. Salemi November 18, 2021 The ABBA rhyme scheme is typical in the Petrarchan sonnet, but it is not as common in English quatrains. The Italian language rhymes very easily, but English does not, and therefore the ABBA scheme is harder to manage successfully in our poetry, since it tends to throw the reader off somewhat. I always advise my students to stick with ABAB quatrains when learning to write the sonnet. You need much experience and skill to handle the ABBA scheme. Reply
Brian Yapko November 18, 2021 Very interesting. Thank you, Joseph, for the rhyme scheme insight. Reply
James A. Tweedie November 18, 2021 Curiously, this sonnet form was what I was taught in high school when I was first introduced to formal poetry. I naively wrote sonnets in this form for thirty years before adopting the Shakespearean form as my default. I’m not convinced that the abbacddceffegg format is any more or less challenging that Shakespearean but I still revert to it from time to time with what I believe is good effect. Petrarchan is, of course, most challenging for reasons Dr. S. explains. SCPs Peter Harley had mastered a particularly challenging variation on the Petrarchan form (which concludes with a couplet) and rarely strays from it. Quite a feat. As for Evan’s dance sonnets, my favorite is the final effort. The form is perfect and the content, powerful–especially in the final six lines. Reply
Margaret Coats November 29, 2021 As abab cdcd efef gg is simply the standard Shakespearean sonnet rhyme scheme, the scheme we see here (abba cddc effe gg) can be called the Shakespearean sonnet rhyme scheme with closed quatrains. Reply
James Sale November 19, 2021 Very fine writing; I like the panoramic sweep of this as myths and world history focus on one point of interest: the dance, a cosmic concept as Dante, for one, clearly shows! Thanks! Reply
Peter Hartley November 19, 2021 Evan – a great pleasure it was to read this quartet, ranging as it does from the world of the Ancient Greek to the Old Testament, thence to the Sun King’s Versailles and on to present-day China, and the four disparate ages all united by a consistent rhyme scheme. There are many little felicities in the writing, and if I could single one out it would be, “Revealing maidens flowing as if one / Big piece of wind-whisked silk.” But there are many more. Well done! Reply
Cheryl Corey November 19, 2021 Quite an ambitious undertaking. My favorites are I. and IV. The totality of the poems stirred my imagination to wonder when & where the first attempts at dance occurred. Reply
Damian Robin November 19, 2021 Wonderful — wonder full — amazing the way the internal spirit moves the human body to express what wells inside with joyful gesture. Like a march of time as well, one after the other, coming forward. The spark of life given traction in dance. None can stand against the power of dance and its inborn (and high born) exuberance. Well done, Evan. Reply
C.B. Anderson November 20, 2021 All of these were well conceived and well executed. If I have a single quibble it is with the use of “make” in the last line of #3. Wouldn’t “build” or “start” be more to the point (and more idiomatic), depending on whether you mean “ballet school” as a building or an institution? Reply
Evan Mantyk November 22, 2021 Thank you all for you comments! To C.B. Anderson, the language here is bounded by the history. Louis XIV (the Sun King) did a lot of building at Versailles, but he did not “build” a dance school. Also “start a ballet school” suggests that there were other ballet schools and he was perhaps opening a local branch. Louis XIV was creating the very first ballet school: the Royal Academy of Dance. Reply
Margaret Coats November 29, 2021 Evan, I am sorry to have taken so long to respond to this wonderful group. It is most interesting to see that the lame Hephaistos is credited with the invention of dance. The Versailles sonnet, with the idea that there should be a school of dance, takes an equally important step in the history of the art. Catherine de Medici had created very significant ballets, but they were all the court dances of varied individuals who were not professionals in the modern sense of educated artists. That first French school advanced the art of dance into its future. And now Shen Yun creates its truly amazing performances with the cooperation of dancers, musicians, costumers, and set designers who live and work closely together to present stories to which all of them are devoted. Reply
Evan Mantyk December 1, 2021 Thank you, Margaret, for your insightful commentary! The irony of the lame god creating dance is interesting, though I didn’t intend that HE made it himself; only that dance is a gift from Heaven and that this ancient passage symbolizes that concept well. Reply