A North Indian family celebrates DiwaliTwo Poems for the Indian Holiday Diwali, by Rohini Sunderam The Society November 12, 2023 Beauty, Culture, Poetry, Villanelle 12 Comments . Glow Brave little candle, shining bright! You send out rays of hope all night. Within your heart you hold a flame, A yellow flame, with loving aim, A flame that banishes the dark, Dispels despair and lights a spark Of faith and hope in every heart. Ignites a love that from the start. We know it’s from your pure, clear light; We learn to love and learn to fight. We see what’s right, we see what’s wrong. We learn to sing a hopeful song. Brave little candle, shining bright. Banish encircling gloom tonight. . . Diwali a villanelle Full fourteen years lord Rama spent in exile, With his wife Sita and his brother Lakshmana— Even gods must live austerely for a while. A simple hut in the forest was their lifestyle. These two princes, Sita, and forest fauna. Full fourteen years lord Rama spent in exile. Lakshman made a magic peristyle. But still a demon, tricked and kidnapped Sita. Even gods must live austerely for a while. God-Hanuman with monkey rank and file Helped Ram and Lakshman find and save poor Sita. Full fourteen years lord Rama spent in exile. Ram, Lakshman, and the monkey army meanwhile Rescued Sita, and returned to Ayodhya— Even Gods must live austerely for a while. The years once passed, Rama returned with a smile. The citizens lit lamps—much joy at this new era Although, full fourteen years he spent in exile. Even gods must live austerely for a while. . . Rohini Sunderam is author of Corpoetry – Desert Flower – Five Lives One Day in Bahrain published by Ex-L-Ence Publishing. She is a Canadian of Indian origin, and a semi-retired advertising copywriter. Find out more about her on her blog or on Amazon. NOTE TO READERS: If you enjoyed this poem or other content, please consider making a donation to the Society of Classical Poets. The Society of Classical Poets does not endorse any views expressed in individual poems or commentary. CODEC Stories:Share this:Click to share on Twitter (Opens in new window)Click to share on Facebook (Opens in new window)Click to print (Opens in new window)Click to share on LinkedIn (Opens in new window)Click to share on WhatsApp (Opens in new window)Click to email a link to a friend (Opens in new window)Click to share on Pinterest (Opens in new window) 12 Responses Paul A. Freeman November 12, 2023 The Festival of Light, Diwali, like Halloween (when I was a kid in the UK there was no such thing), is now much celebrated in the UK, so it’s great to see some poetry about the occasion. I liked ‘Glow’ for its simultaneous simplicity and profundity. One thing. Did you consider reversing the final couplet, so the poem begins and ends with the same line? Reading your villanelle reminds me that my own skill in this form is limited and I really should attempt trying one again. I read ‘Diwali’ first as a piece of prose to get the story before reading it as poetry. You’ve done a fine job with fitting the story behind the festival’s origins in such a small number of words with a perfect story arc, Rohini. Thanks for the reads. Reply Rohini November 12, 2023 Thank you for that feedback. To reverse those last two lines, is an interesting idea, but I may need to rethink the entire verse. I find the villanelle challenging. So I will try it and let’s see how it goes. Thanks so much for reading it. Reply Margaret Coats November 12, 2023 “Glow” is a charming little candle of celebration. I can see it singing joyfully even as it burns down. In the villanelle “Diwali” the repetitions of the first refrain emphasize the length of fourteen years. The second refrain, “Even gods must live austerely for a while,” is a splendid line of contented wisdom about the vicissitudes of life. Nice work, Rohini. Reply Rohini November 12, 2023 Thank you! Reply Roy Eugene Peterson November 12, 2023 Rohini, those are two precious poems celebrating the salutary effects of light that are both charming and illuminating. The second poem obviously goes beyond the light and to a lesson we learn that even for the gods there may be some austere and dark years. I enjoyed both very much. You wrote them beautifully. Reply Rohini November 12, 2023 Thank you, Roy. I always learn a lot from the comments here. Reply Susan Jarvis Bryant November 12, 2023 Thought-provokingly beautiful and admirably crafted, Rohini! It’s a real treat to see you mastering the villanelle with engaging words of wonder. Happy Diwali! May your lights burn brightly! Reply Rohini November 12, 2023 Thank you Susan! The villanelle is quite a challenge for me. But I do plan to work at it so that it flows better. Reply Cheryl Corey November 12, 2023 I also love the simplicity of “Glow”. It has a sentiment that hopefully can carry us through the holiday season. Reply Rohini November 13, 2023 Thank you Reply David Hollywood November 13, 2023 These are terrific poems Rohini and your line ‘Even God’s must live austerly for a while’ is wonderfully philosophical. Many thanks. Reply Rohini November 14, 2023 Thank you so very much, David. I’m always so touched that you stop by to read my words. Reply Leave a Reply Cancel ReplyYour email address will not be published.CommentName* Email* Website Captcha loading...In order to pass the CAPTCHA please enable JavaScript. Notify me of follow-up comments by email. Notify me of new posts by email. Δ This site uses Akismet to reduce spam. Learn how your comment data is processed.
Paul A. Freeman November 12, 2023 The Festival of Light, Diwali, like Halloween (when I was a kid in the UK there was no such thing), is now much celebrated in the UK, so it’s great to see some poetry about the occasion. I liked ‘Glow’ for its simultaneous simplicity and profundity. One thing. Did you consider reversing the final couplet, so the poem begins and ends with the same line? Reading your villanelle reminds me that my own skill in this form is limited and I really should attempt trying one again. I read ‘Diwali’ first as a piece of prose to get the story before reading it as poetry. You’ve done a fine job with fitting the story behind the festival’s origins in such a small number of words with a perfect story arc, Rohini. Thanks for the reads. Reply
Rohini November 12, 2023 Thank you for that feedback. To reverse those last two lines, is an interesting idea, but I may need to rethink the entire verse. I find the villanelle challenging. So I will try it and let’s see how it goes. Thanks so much for reading it. Reply
Margaret Coats November 12, 2023 “Glow” is a charming little candle of celebration. I can see it singing joyfully even as it burns down. In the villanelle “Diwali” the repetitions of the first refrain emphasize the length of fourteen years. The second refrain, “Even gods must live austerely for a while,” is a splendid line of contented wisdom about the vicissitudes of life. Nice work, Rohini. Reply
Roy Eugene Peterson November 12, 2023 Rohini, those are two precious poems celebrating the salutary effects of light that are both charming and illuminating. The second poem obviously goes beyond the light and to a lesson we learn that even for the gods there may be some austere and dark years. I enjoyed both very much. You wrote them beautifully. Reply
Susan Jarvis Bryant November 12, 2023 Thought-provokingly beautiful and admirably crafted, Rohini! It’s a real treat to see you mastering the villanelle with engaging words of wonder. Happy Diwali! May your lights burn brightly! Reply
Rohini November 12, 2023 Thank you Susan! The villanelle is quite a challenge for me. But I do plan to work at it so that it flows better. Reply
Cheryl Corey November 12, 2023 I also love the simplicity of “Glow”. It has a sentiment that hopefully can carry us through the holiday season. Reply
David Hollywood November 13, 2023 These are terrific poems Rohini and your line ‘Even God’s must live austerly for a while’ is wonderfully philosophical. Many thanks. Reply
Rohini November 14, 2023 Thank you so very much, David. I’m always so touched that you stop by to read my words. Reply